Thursday, February 17, 2011

Pokemon: Crimson Destiny Fanfic Chapter II

Hey guys!  So first, here's a brief summation of current stuff.

Wrote an in-class essay worth 5%, I kind of procrastinated the preparations, so I don't think I did great, but I'm thinking I didn't get any lower than, say, a B-.  We'll see!  After the break (Reading Week) an out-of-class comparative essay (750 words) is due, which means I have to get to work within the next three days or so...
Not much else to say...  Still writing poetry here and there, but I think I should refrain from posting it all online...

Here's Chapter two of my Fan-fic!  I plan to write many chapters, since it's a preliminary for myself as an aspiring author.  Since it's Pokemon, I probably can't ever get it published, but if I can do well with this, I'll at long last be able to move onto an original novel!  I'm already almost done part 1 of chapter 3, so here's all of chapter two!

Note:  I'm planning to completely edit/revamp the whole thing later, so sometimes you'll notice something is capitalized when it shouldn't be, or certain things are described in detail and others not, etc...
You'll also notice weird spacing, but it's not so consequential at this point...

Here you go!  Suggestions, criticisms etc.  Lemme know!

Pokemon:  Crimson Destiny

Chapter II, Legends and Rivals  Part I

"Pokemon, go!" shouted Crimz as he tossed his Pokeball into the fray.

With small, stout legs and short arms reaching out into the sky, each with three tiny fingers, the Pokemon sprung joyously forth from its Pokeball.  The large, brown shell on its back distinguished its body and round head from the backdrop of the clear, blue sky.  The Pokemon landed artfully with its curled blue tail wagging out on one side.

"Squirtle, go!" Crimz commanded, and Squirtle trotted quickly toward the big, green, crooked-faced Cacturne.

Aware, Cacturne turned its attention away from Lance's Pokemon and charge boastingly toward Squirtle.  The red Gyarados was still hanging in there.

"Squirtle, slow it down first with Bubble!"  ordered Crimz.

Cacturne's arm was swinging again, preparing for another thrust of its needly arm, but from Squirtle's mouth a huge flurry of bubbles swarmed and enveloped the Cacturne's body.  It's sinister face flushed with panic, lifting away all traces of earlier moxie.

"Now blast it with your Water Gun!"  Crimz commanded.

A stream of water bursted forth from Squirtle's mouth, knocking the incopacitated Cacturne onto the hard, stone-paved ground.

"Hey hey, kid, don't get too confident now.  That little squirt can't possibly take down my Cacturne!" said the Rocket girl.  "Cacturne, get up and prepare yourself, now!"

"Alright squirtle, let's do Bubble again--"

"Sucker Punch!" the girl hastily commanded.

Cacturne suddenly sped up and pounded Squirtle before it could prepare its attack.  The hit was hard, the damage high; Squirtled crashed down hard into the ground, bouncing once on its shell before landing on his stomache.  It couldn't get back up.

"No, Squirtle..." muttered Crimz, disappointed.

"Hahaha, there's no way that little Squirtle of yours could get up after a hit like that from my high-level Cacturne.  You've lost!"  concurred the Rocket girl.

"Ruby, just finish them off for good!" yelled the Rocket man.

"No need, no need.  Haven't I done that already?  Let's just let him cry."

"Do you..." Crimz mumbled quietly.

"Huh?" Ruby turned and looked in his direction again.

"Do you really think...that I could be beaten...SO EASILY!?" Crimz yelled in anger.  "Squirtle!"


Squirtled remained flat on the ground, still as stone.  Suddenly, a blue aura began to luminate about its body as it lifted itself up from the ground with its small arms.  A new look of determined adamance posessed the glowing Squirtle, as though its personality had been wiped away.

"I'll teach you not to under estimate me, FOR GOOD!" shouted Crimz.

The bewildered Ruby glanced over at her colleague.  "Toxin...  What's up with that--"

"Torrent." said Toxin, the Rocket man.

"Squirtle, first use Bubble!" Crimz commanded, brimming with confidence.

Again, Squirtle blasted out a barrage of bubbles, but this time the attack was a lot bigger and stronger!

"Cacturne, break out of it!  Right now!" Demanded Ruby, but Cacturne was almost completely immobilized.

"Let's finish this!  Water gun, go!" Crimz commanded.

Squirtle let loose a huge blast of concentrated water that completely overpowered Cacturne, sending it slamming into the temple wall.

"Cheh...  Cacturne, return..." said Ruby as she beamed the Pokemon back into its ball.  "Beginner's luck!"

"Gyarados, return." ordered Lance as he beamed back the exhauted red dragon.

I wouldn't have thought that an unevolved water type like Squirtle could have taken down that grass type Cacturne, but I proved that wrong.  This Squirtle should be pretty low level though, can I even take out that guy's Nidoking?  Squirtle may have the type advantage, but what does that matter against a fully evolved, high-level Pokemon?


But I have to try!

"Squirtle, go!" ordered Crimz.

"Hey you, little punk." said Toxin.

"Huh?" said Crimz in surprise, and Squirtle also stopped to listen.

"You think you're real tough now that now that you've beaten that pathetic Ruby and her pathetic Pokemon, am I right?" asked Toxin.

"What!?" shrieked Ruby vehemently.

"I think you're weak too, filthy Rocket." said Crimz with bravado.

"What moxie, condescending little punk.  Well, you are correct that most Rocket grunts are weak, all with nothing but hollow confidence.  Weak in numbers, defenseless on their own - That they are.  Compared to me, that is."  said Toxin. "Ruby is soft.   Little punk, I'll show you how weak you and your Pokemon really are."

"Bring it!  Squirtle, Water Gun!" Crimz shouted.

"You can't!  ...  Go Dra--!"

"Wait."  said Lance as he blocked the robed girl with his right arm, eyes still focused on the battle.

Squirtle ran over toward the towering Nidoking and blasted out another power-pumped Water Gun attack, a perfect hit.  However, Crimz and Squirtle were surprised to see that Nidoking barely cringed from the attack and easily stood its ground.

"Surprised?  Little kid, I can see into your heart.  Right now you're thinking, '~I don't stand a chance, I was wrong.  I shouldn't have gotten myself involved...~'  Am I right?"  said Toxin mockingly.


"Now you're thinking, '~It's alright, Lance the dragon master is here.  He can't possibly lose, he was once the champion of the Elite Four.  He would never lose to the likes of Team Rocket!~'  Am I right?  Of course I am...  Nidoking, Thunderbolt."
Before Crimz could even give out a command, Squirtle was completely encased in a shroud of electrifying yellow!
Super-effective damage from a strong Pokemon's Thunderbolt left Squirtle unconscious and completely unable to battle anymore.  Defeated.


Crimz was stunned; speechless and completely disillusioned.

"Hey, little punk.  What's with that shocked face?  Your Pokemon is the shell-shocked one, hahaha!  I can tell you what your Squirtle is thinking, kid.  It's thinking, 'Why was I cursed with such a pathetic little punk for a trainer?'"  Toxin laughed darkly.  "Oh, and that Cacturne from earlier?  It had already taken heavy damage from that Gyarados before you came!  Hahahahaha!"

"S-Squirtle...  Return..."  said Crimz in a fragile voice.

"That's about enough of that."  said Lance.  "Go...  My friend."

Out from the ball came a huge Pokemon.  Its body towered over Nidoking, strong and dignified.  It's enormous tail was like a second half of its body, casting off a mild wind whenever it swayed.  With arms and large legs each tipped with three jagged claws, tiny bat-like wings and a white serpentine underside extending from its neck to the tip of its tail, the Pokemon's skin shone a bright orange under the beaming morning sun.




Pokemon:  Crimson Destiny

Chapter II, Legends and Rivals  Part II

"Nidoking, Giga Impact!"  Commanded Toxin.

"Dragonite, Hyper Beam!" shouted Lance.

Once again, Nidoking became engulfed in its own aura, then charged briskly toward the valiant dragon standing before it.  Dragonite's head reared back, gathering speckles of energy into a ball.  As soon as Nidoking had closed in, Dragonite fired the powerful Hyper Beam.  Nidoking's Giga Impact attack was easily overpowered by the immense force of Dragonite - Lance the dragon master's strongest known Pokemon!

"Nidoking, return."  Said Toxin as his Pokemon was transported back into its Pokeball.  "Heh, i would expect nothing less of the former Pokemon League Champion.  No, in fact, I actually expected more.  You disappoint me, 'dragon master'.

-[Kssssshhhhht - Toxin, we failed.  Some young punk messed things up on our end.  We're movin' out! - Kssssshhhhht]-  Toxin grabbed the Walkie Talkie from the belt at his waist.  -Kssssshhhhht "Fine, we're moving out as well.  Notify headquarters."

"Not so fast!" said the robed girl as she pulled out a Pokeball, but Toxin and Ruby excaped with a ball of smoke.


The Rockets were gone, the temple safe, but Crimz was still on his kness, shocked and depressed.


"YEAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH!!  WAY TO GOOOOOOO!!"  The people around were clapping and cheering.  But why were they so happy?

Lance and the robed girl stepped over to Crimz, giving him a hand getting up.

"They've seen your bravery, kid.  This is the village's way of thanking you."  said Lance.

Crimz stood up and looked out in the crowd of people, wiping away a tear from his eye.  He smiled proudly for a moment, but cringed in frustration immediately after.  He wanted revenge.

"Was that your first battle?  That was some decent battling.  I saw you storm into the temple earlier, did elder Carnellius give you a Pokemon?"  said the robed girl as the crowd began to dissipate.

"You're--"  Crimz mumbled, interupted.

"Oh, that's right!  I haven't introduced myself, I always forget!  My name's Roary!  Roary the--"

"Dragon trainer."  Crimz interrupted.  "Having lived on the plains just an hour from here, I've heard all about the famous dragon trainers.  Lance, the dragon master and former Champion of Johto's Elite Four, and  Roary, a child prodigy who became the rival of Blackthorn city's Claire, but lost to her many years ago, along with the right to become the Blackthorn gym leader."

"Humph!  I've gotten a lot stronger since then!" claimed Roary, irritated.

"Then there's Claire, the female dragon master and Blackthorn gym leader, currently on the rise again as a new Elite Four candidate."  Crimz added.

"Hey hey, you're pretty knowledgeable." said Lance.

"Grrrr I'll defeat her!  Come on, bring her here, that Claire wouldn't stand a chance now!" Roary exasperated.

"Well, it's about time for me to leave..."  said Lance.

"Where are you going?"  asked Crimz.

"He's going on a new journey!"  said Roary excitedly.

"A new journey..."  said Crimz.

"Yeah, it's been a long time since I've journeyed around like the old days.  I'm off to rediscover myself...  ...
...And the world of Pokemon..."  Lance replied.  "Crimz, this is only the beginning for you.  Your very first journey.  Have fun with it, and take care!"  said Lance, the dragon master.

...  "Crimz."  said Lance as he turned around, facing the road.

"Become strong."  said Lance as he walked off, heading back toward the Waterfall entrance.

...  Cool

"Keep this a secret, but truth is, Lance has been in a slump.  Ever since he was defeated in the Pokemon League, he hasn't been able to battle with his former power.  That's why he's going on a journey!  I'm on a journey too, Crimz!  And it's just about time for me to leave!  Who knows, maybe we'll meet up somewhere.  I don't know about the dragon master, but I'll give you a battle once you've gotten good and strong!  Bye!"  Shouted Roary as she jogged away.  

It couldn't be seen clearly from so far away, but she eventually summoned a Pokemon from a ball and disappeared into the sky.  On what, Crimz did not know.

"Crimz!"  yelled a voice right behind him, startling him badly.

"WHAT!"  Crimz turned around and yelled back.  ...  "Uh, sorry, you startled me...  Wanna' try not yelling in my ear next time?"

It was the robed man from earlier that was guarding the village entrance with Roary.

"Hahaha."  laughed the man, patting his back amiably with brutish force.  "Come on."

"Hey, um..."  Crimz muttered.


"Who are you?"  asked Crimz.

"EEEEEHHHHH!?"  the man yelled with a comical face.  "Ugh...  My name's Jagg!  Got it?  Jagg!"

"Ooh...  You're..."  Crimz paused.


"Nope, don't remember anyone named Jagg..."

"Ghaaa!"  sighed Jagg.  "At any rate, let's go into the temple, your grandfather, I mean, Elder Carnellius has asked for you to come in, now that all the commotion's over with!"


"You, over there!  You too..."  said Jagg.

Standing several meters away, leaning against the temple stood a tall young man, not much older than Crimz.  Black pants, a silver belt, and a blue jean-jacket over a buttoned white dress shirt unbuttoned around the collar, with short, dark, parted hair and cold, dark, confident eyes.

"That was a pathetic battle you made me watch."  he said.

"What...  Well why don't you--"  Crimz caught his tongue, and the young man turned away and stepped slowly toward the temple doors.

I can't ask him for a battle, I don't have any useable Pokemon right now...  That jerk, thinks he's so cool...  I'd like to seehim battle a Cacturne and a Nidoking...

Crimz followed him to the Elder's room, while Jagg waited at the entrance.

"Welcome back."  said Elder Carnellius.  "First, give me your Pokeball."

"Uh, okay Grandpa.  Here."  said Crimz as he handed it over.

A robed, hooded lady who had been standing in the other far corner of the room, completely unnoticed, stepped over and received the Pokeball from Carnellius, then bowed and left.

"She'll take care of your tired Pokemon for you.  Your Squirtle will returned to you in good health very soon."

"So that was your very first Pokemon.  No wonder you were weak."  said the young man.  "You picked a water type, so...  Elder Carnellius, please give me a Charmander."

The elder passed one of the encased Pokeballs over to Rane.  "Here you go."

"Although it would seem the two of you have met, let me introduce the both of you."  Said Carnellius.  This is Crimz, my grandson.  And Crimz, this is..."


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